These days, a great number of children prefer spending time on computer games rather on sports. Why? Is it a positive or negative development?
Nowadays, the figure for children who would rather play games than play sports is significantly increasing. Personally, i believe this is a negative development.
Spending too much time on playing video games is caused by some following reasons. Firstly, games are more interactive and available than sports. That is because there are more and more companies built to earn money from magnifying and advertising games on some social media such as Instagram, Facebook or Zalo. Therefore, children can easily find interesting games on the Internet to play when they have free time. The second is that video games are much easier for teenagers to play. For instance, just by downloading games into their computers or smart phones, they can play it anywhere and anytime without doing physical exercises like playing sports.
From my perspective, computer games can bring children a lot of detrimental effects. Firstly, focusing too much on games can have a negative impact on teenagers' health as well as their mind. In fact, there is a mixed variety of diseases they can get such as short-sighted, backache, headache or psychological problems like depression, autism and so on. Furthermore, playing video games too frequently can lead to some severe social issues. For example, many recent studies show that nearly 30 percent of crimes nowadays is related to people who are addicted to games.
To sum up, playing games too much more than sports can cause a lot of drawbacks. I personally believe that this trend should be prevented to ensure the proper development of children.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1326.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1796875 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7722708814 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58984375 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6943817552 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0666666667 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53333333333 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180142826164 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688047286352 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415978533804 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113996991152 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031137492973 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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