Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not real needs of the society in which they are sold
To what extend do you agree?
It is widely held belief that the development of revenue of popular products shows influential advantages of advertisement. Although those goods are not indispensable. However, I partly agree that with this idea as individuals just spend their money for reasonable purposes.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that advertising is a great tool to enlarge businesses as it can attract consumers by showing only advantageous parts. For example, Facebook users hold sale pages and request advertising goods by paying money for Facebook. Then, Facebook identifies potential customers and publicize products on the mail wall of those people. However, businesses must invest a lot of money to it and it may challenge to start-up.
On the other hand, quality is the first priority that consumers consider to buy a product. In fact, online shopping is not just about popularity but also feedbacks of people who bought goods. Furthermore, people appreciate their hard work definitely not be silly to spend money on products which are not good as advertised.
In conclusion, besides the larger spreading of products by advertisement, the quality of goods all play an important role in long-term growth.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nfluential advantages of advertisement. Although those goods are not indispensable. Howe...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider buying'.
Suggestion: consider buying
...ty is the first priority that consumers consider to buy a product. In fact, online shopping is ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, for example, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1007.0 1615.20841683 62% => OK
No of words: 190.0 315.596192385 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 4.20363070211 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01955308465 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.647368421053 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 311.4 506.74238477 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.6021440565 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.5454545455 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2727272727 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0909090909 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113930701445 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0400785493985 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0253537101574 0.0667982634062 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0625888198981 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0197337526553 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nfluential advantages of advertisement. Although those goods are not indispensable. Howe...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider buying'.
Suggestion: consider buying
...ty is the first priority that consumers consider to buy a product. In fact, online shopping is ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, for example, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1007.0 1615.20841683 62% => OK
No of words: 190.0 315.596192385 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 4.20363070211 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01955308465 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.647368421053 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 311.4 506.74238477 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.6021440565 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.5454545455 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2727272727 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0909090909 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113930701445 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0400785493985 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0253537101574 0.0667982634062 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0625888198981 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0197337526553 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.