Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What are the main effects of this epidemic?
Nowadays, the prevalence of overweight increase constantly.This essay will discuss the main causes and the possible effect of the problems.
I believe that the factors responsible for obesity are low physical activity and unhealthy food. In recent years, a modern technology gives an alternative way for people leaving conventional method. As a result, more advance technology available lead those people to choose technology which is lower energy usage and lower time consumed for instance bicycle having machine, motorcycle. Hence, they rely on using these technologies instead of walking.As consequence, less physical activity will impact of lower calories burned and gaining weight.
Moreover, a number of people eating unhealthy food are high.Fast food, noodle, is one of the most commons food consumed. It is due to the fact that easier to find (shorter time for food delivery and preparation, affordable places for sale). The cases are truly in the majority of Indonesian student (tertiary-level students)
The possible effects of this problems include a stress and suffering chronic disease namely silent disease.Firstly, I strongly believed that overweight is one of the most common causes of stress. It has several consequences in the human existence for instance lack of self-confidence towards community and social involvement which indirectly manifest as a stress. Secondly, suffering from chronic illness is the issue which is resulted form many people consuming junk food. In other word, those people consuming fast food have higher risk of obesity 5-fold times.Cardiovascular and metabolic disease are the most common manifestation of people eating fast food.
To conclude, overweight is one of the most problems threatening people nowadays.It is mainly caused by less physical activity and unhealthy food, and the consequences are stress and suffering silent disease or non-communicable disease.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.70034843206 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13478493939 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574912891986 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0716474278 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.333333333 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9166666667 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112232555527 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0418691494117 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043283807836 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0739278181457 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426652988377 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.08 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.06 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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