Topic: many people put their personal information online (address, telephone, number, and so on) for purposes such as signing up for social networks or online banking. Is this a positive or negative development?
It is undeniable that the advancement of technology has shifted human behaviours in an unprecedented way. Such changes can be seen in the way people record and exchange their personal data due to the introduction of the internet. Personally, this trend has exerted both positive and negative effects on our society.
On the one hand, online platforms have become a breeding ground for criminal activities. Since people have switched from physical to virtual data storage for information such as addresses, phone numbers, passwords, they are more prone to cybercriminals. These frauds exploit and steal user's information for illicit purposes like stealing their deposit, selling their data. For example, recently, Facebook, one of the largest online platforms, has to face lawsuits for leaking personal data of over 500 million users on hacking forums. That is to say, the more information people post online, the more susceptible they are to sophisticated hacking schemes.
On the flip side, online information records have many advantages to offer. First and foremost, social networks have removed the geographic boundaries and helped people stay connected just by signing up with personal data. This innovation has facilitated many businesses and individuals in exchanging information instantly and avoiding work stagnant. Secondly, the advent of online banking has free people from time-consuming procedures at the banks as they can transfer money despite times. Additionally, by synchronising personal details with exclusive accounts, shoppers can have a superior experience just at their fingertips. This is clearly exemplified under the Covid-19 lockdown situation when people switch from physical stores to virtual commerce which makes more convenient online purchases and payments. Thus, the whole economy can remain moving without risking people's health.
In conclusion, as long as people are highly aware of the risk of cybercrimes when updating personal information, the developments in storing personal information online hold some undeniable merits that have been applied widely.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an unprecedented way" with adverb for "unprecedented"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1790.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.73717948718 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93611436887 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1946436108 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.875 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359553688363 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100693130878 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459555649662 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185698301059 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524228950275 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.01 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.4 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.