Topic: As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities.
Some people claim that apart from earning money, companies should be in charge of social activities. In my opinion, I am totally in favor of this view for the following reasons.
On the one hand, we cannot deny that making money makes a crucial contribution to businesses. The first reason is that the more profits they make, the more taxes they must pay. As a result, governments can use this amount of money for different purposes. For example, they can invest in hospitals, schools,… to improve material facilities. Secondly, it is undeniable that companies also need money for other fees such as employees’ wages, payments for buildings… I believe that If a company do not invest in improvements, it is inevitable that they will go bankrupt soon.
On the other hand, not only should businesses concentrate on creating profits, but they also should take responsible for society. This means that what they can contribute is to create more jobs for people, especially people who live in poor countryside. If people have chance to work in a large company which treat them well, they can improve their living standards. In addition, businesses should put money back into the community through supporting charities, financing scholarships… For example, every year, there are a large number of companies making donations for poor children and awarding scholarships for students such as Vinamilk, Unilever.
To sum up, I believe that it is essential for bosses to raise money so that they can remain their companies. However, at the same time, they also should take notice of their social responsibilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , …
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Line 3, column 522, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, apart from, for example, in addition, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1357.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15969581749 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90049028684 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.600760456274 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.4746784837 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.384615385 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2307692308 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4615384615 7.06120827912 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200009121163 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070306714255 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050752403972 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11533528717 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286959264062 0.056905535591 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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