Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the Internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development overweight the disadvantages?

Revolution of the education system can be seen nowadays as many universities and academies starts providing on line education for the students.In my point of view, despite of having number of benefits it surely have some drawbacks.

To start with,we have to believe that on line education do have some major problems.First of all, for the students who cannot concentrate in their studies properly get distracted either by some interesting online games or by social chatting sites like Facebook ,snap chat ,Instagram etc.Online preparation fails to boost the confidence of the students in adequate amount . for illustration , according to the newspaper article published in 2017, we can know that more than half students failed to score pass marks who are prepared by online classes.Therefore, it have some disadvantage of the online classes to those students who lack self control.

However , if we see it form the positive side, many glories are achieved through the internet study. distance education helps to manage time for the students.Learner can practice any part of the study in any time they want which help them to reduce certain pressure of the students.In addition to it, online education is especially for those who are self learner and who are often sick because it is economical and learners do not have to travel from one corner to other.It is cheaper then academies so everyone can take help from it.for instance,one of my uncle Daniel completed his master degree from the online education service and now he is CEO of Kathmandu bank.Thus,online helps to share the different techniques to the learners which is the profit.

In nutshell,online education is new way of getting education but traditional education plays a vital role in producing good manpower for the country. it is better to have education by linking with good teachers.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, in addition, first of all, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18936877076 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01409862355 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607973421927 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 20.2975951904 212% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 189.150733543 49.4020404114 383% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 223.142857143 106.682146367 209% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 43.0 20.7667163134 207% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.1428571429 7.06120827912 214% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 29.0 5.01903807615 578% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0660630821898 0.244688304435 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0291121522313 0.084324248473 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0265074861015 0.0667982634062 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0337681242347 0.151304729494 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319500443428 0.056905535591 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.5 13.0946893788 187% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 19.37 50.2224549098 39% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.2 11.3001002004 188% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.71 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 19.2 10.1190380762 190% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.7795591182 186% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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