The use of social media is replacing face to face interaction among many people in society Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

In modern life, almost all people consider using social media as a way to relieve stress after tension work hours. Despite benefits that social network brings, I believe that the advantages are less significant in comparison with the drawbacks.
It is argued that social media is a precious quarry that people exploited a lot. First, it aids in connecting people which live apart in the world. When students live far from home, they could save money for payment in contact with parents by phone. Second, in terms of social-political issues, people might express their views through status on Facebook, Twitter and Instagram and share widely. Lastly, the social network seems to be more valuable when it creates job for thousands of people worldwide, which results in unemployment reduction. Thanks to this network, a range of novel jobs like becoming an influencer, video creator emerges. For example, a Youtuber earns an income of many millions of dollars each year due to making video and promotion.
It would be better if social media would not yet exist. It changes the way that people interact with each other. Family members stare at a mobile phone screen for hours on end compared to have a conversation directly in the past, thereby reducing the bond between e. They find it difficult to guess emotions without face to face interaction. Social media is also a hazardous place where people easily become a victim of cyber-bullying. Either unaware or deliberate comments can hurt someone. More seriously, it is a factor contributing to many high-profile suicide cases. Moreover, an attack can increase the likelihood of depression in juvenile. A source of hidden dangers in this space was not realised by people. Much personal information could be stolen if users share so much about their private life and activities. It leads to a variety of crimes such as hackers, burglary and murder.
In conclusion, since the disadvantages outweigh the benefits, there is no choice except to use social media for appropriate purpose and frequency to get high value from this.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, moreover, second, so, for example, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1733.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08211143695 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7316869017 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.653958944282 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5482671988 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5238095238 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2380952381 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231280167193 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560663811566 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556117819311 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135941491885 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202241593723 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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