Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
In the society, there are lots of successful people. Someone argue that all of them mostly depend on luck to reach the aims. In my view point, I entirely disagree with this opinion.
I believe that people have to work hard and comeover the dificult processes . For instance, a writer who wrote the novel which was called Harry Potter. That novel has become well known and has been sold over the world. The writer, J.K Rolling overcomed many refuses from producers, but not giving up, she was patient and assiduous until this book was accepted and sold widespread. That is attemption by herself to achieve goal and turn into a successful woman. In other case from my country, Nguyen Ngoc Ky, who was a teacher despite not having any hands since he was young. Trying his best, he used his legs to write. Consequently, he become a famous teacher and everyone is always appriciate and respect his efforts and successes.
On the other hand, I think lucky is just a little part in someone’s success. Firstly, people do not merely depend on luck to become successful. One student will not get a high score or pass the exam if he/she does not revise or practise homework. Secondly, the lucky just happen in short term, such as winning a lottery, one can not win lottery his or her whole life.
To sum up, for the reasons that I have mention above, I totally believe that people want to achieve their goals and turn into a successful person, they must have extreme passion, determine to follow their objectives and hard working. Therefore they will be successful in whatever they do.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i think, in short, such as, in my view, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1306.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69784172662 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41951147774 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.640287769784 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.8615337382 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.8235294118 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3529411765 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41176470588 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101144943019 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0310964904972 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448227454238 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0718543667423 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442698846648 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.0946893788 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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