20.09.2017 Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.
In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make?
Has this become a positive or negative development?
There is no doubt that technology has altered the way people converse with one another. Below the ways in which the trend has impacted people’s relationships will be discussed in details.
To begin with, technology has dramatically changed the way people make friends and find partners. Firstly, folk used to make acquaintances at workplace, gyms, cinema theaters and festivals by personally interacting with potential friends; nowadays, the process has undergone a remarkable transformation. For instance, many acquire new pals in the internet on such social websites as Facebook and Instagram where individuals could become friends without seeing each other in person. Secondly, search for a lover has become much easier since Tinder had arrived. Those who are looking for a romance may start a new relationship more comfortably and a number of possible partners are immense. To illustrate, in 1990s a person’s choice was limited to the people a fellow knows personally; The situation has changed and now the pool of potential dates is immense. In other words, the way people interact and build their lives has been transformed by the novel technology.
Finally, it appears that those shifts have brought rather benevolent results. For instance, shy individuals who used to suffer to make new acquaintances now do not face this issue. Moreover, handicapped people whose ability to move around is restricted by their condition could feel joy of chatting and making new buddies from around the world while being at home. Furthermore, a large number of adults used to have troubles to find a decent boyfriend or girlfriend because they worked a lot or even gave up the idea all together. However, the advent of dating apps provides them with an indispensable opportunity to find someone while knowing ahead that this person’s attitude toward them. Thus, using internet services and websites allows people to have better and happier lives.
To sum up, unquestionably technology has enormously influenced the way individuals interact and establish relationships. Although some might dislike or be afraid of the shits, I personally think that those changes are rather positive ones.
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Essay evaluation report
Firstly, folk used to make acquaintances
Firstly, folks used to make acquaintances
flaws:
1. duplicated content, like:
A: Secondly, search for a lover has become much easier since Tinder had arrived. Those who are looking for a romance may start a new relationship more comfortably and a number of possible partners are immense.
B: To illustrate, in 1990s a person’s choice was limited to the people a fellow knows personally; The situation has changed and now the pool of potential dates is immense. In other words, the way people interact and build their lives has been transformed by the novel technology.
A and B are somehow similar.
2. duplicated words/phrases, look for example:
folk used to make acquaintances
who used to suffer
a large number of adults used to have troubles to find
a number of possible partners are immense
the pool of potential dates is immense
3. the word may be not used properly, look at 'converse':
There is no doubt that technology has altered the way people converse with one another.
'converse' mostly mean 'talk, discuss, speak, chat', while the topic can may any kinds of communications.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 345 350
No. of Characters: 1795 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.31 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.203 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.807 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.294 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.313 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.824 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.309 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.499 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
the second question - is the
the second question - is the structure of essay correct?
intro -
-first para- In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make?
second para- Has this become a positive or negative development
conclusion
One last question.
One last question.
In order to avoid duplicated content am I allowed to speak about new benefits in the second body para?
for instance,
the first para - the way we make friends and find romantic relationships has changed.
the second para - handicapped people do not feel isolated. Children who move abroad may stay in touch with parents. there is no loneliness because some of your friends are always online?
Would this structure work?
Yes, no difference for the
Yes, no difference for the benefits we talk.
the structure of this essay would always be:
paragraph 1: introduction
paragraph 2: In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make?
paragraph 3: Has this become a positive or negative development?
paragraph 4: conclusion
we can do whatever we like to do inside the paragraph.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 705, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1990s'.
Suggestion: in the 1990s
...le partners are immense. To illustrate, in 1990s a person's choice was limited to t...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 379, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...world while being at home. Furthermore, a large number of adults used to have troubles to find a ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for instance, no doubt, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1860.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 345.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39130434783 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96870748181 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634782608696 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9924733403 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.411764706 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2941176471 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0588235294 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288099805716 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890371866184 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775714577627 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17458288364 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.072131344806 0.056905535591 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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