Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Today, there are many ways to be successful in a job for everyone. Making a good connection with others can be one of them. It helps to increase income. While, some people believe that, studying hard can be more useful to be successful in a job. I believe that the first group is better for the following reasons.
The first reason is that, knowing to create a good relationship with others in a successful job is very necessary. They have more opportunities to increase the number of customers. Expanding the number of customers is caused to increase income. Thus, if a company arise the amount of its budget, it will be able to expand its business. For example, my father is a businessman. I remember that He always tried to make a new good relationship with people. At first he had a small carpet shopping. Gradually, he increased the sales of productions by attracting people to buy the carpet. Now, he has established many carpet shopping centers in many cities. He has created many job situations in his business.
Secondly, making a good connection with others has great effects to be successful in a job. people have more chance to find many friends. Thus, civilians able to spend more their time to speak with others about job topics. So, it makes them for getting new ideas to find their favorite business. For example, a new research has been done on two groups of young people who were interested to make a connection with different groups and young people who were not. This study shows that, the first group is more successful in their business. However, make a well connection with people has benefit results to make progress in a job.
On the other hand, some people are on the belief that, studying hard in a university has more effective in a successful job. When people do more research on various topics, they will have a better imagination to work in a job. For example, one of my friends was a good student at the university, he always was researching on many topics. Now, He is a manager in one of the famous companies.
In conclusion, being successful in a job depends on many factors. Everybody should try to get his/her goal. I believe that, making a good connection is very important to be successful in a job.
- Tpo 21 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 61
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 56
- Educating children is a hard task because of using cell phones and games online 60
- Yellow cedars 71
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...reat effects to be successful in a job. people have more chance to find many friends. ...
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Line 5, column 310, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'new research'.
Suggestion: new research
...d their favorite business. For example, a new research has been done on two groups of young pe...
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Line 7, column 300, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
...as a good student at the university, he always was researching on many topics. Now, He is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1864.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 398.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68341708543 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69816024082 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437185929648 0.561755894193 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 584.1 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 16.0721442886 180% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.7479927439 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 64.275862069 106.682146367 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.724137931 20.7667163134 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89655172414 7.06120827912 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 8.67935871743 265% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216218957731 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063062518637 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550593436171 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136698965463 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041822720322 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 13.0946893788 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 50.2224549098 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.27 12.4159519038 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.82 8.58950901804 79% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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