Populations of the yellow cedars
The reading passage is about the causes of a decline in the populations of yellow cedar trees in North America but the lecturer refutes the reading's ideas.First, the reading says bark beetles, a kind of insect, attack the trees and their larvae eat the wood which damages the trees.However, the lecturer says healthy cedars are resistant to insects because they produce a poison that kills the insects and that the insects attack trees are already sick, damaged, or even dead.Second, according to the reading brown bears claw at the tree bark because it has much sugar which bears want to eat them. But the lecture rejects this idea and believes that it happens sometimes that bears attack to trees, but it is not the cause of destroying because there are not any bears in that area where cedars grow.Finally, the reading passage says changing climate is another causes which destroys yellow cedars because trees always grow at the first of spring, but now because of changing climate, those grow at the end of winter, so on cold winter nights that is possible to freeze the root of trees and eventually killing them. While according to the lecture most of the trees usually died somewhere in the low elevation where is warm than the high elevation where is cold so this cause cannot be responsible for killing cedars.
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- Yellow cedars 71
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 156, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: First
...the lecturer refutes the readings ideas.First, the reading says bark beetles, a kind ...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 283, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...ae eat the wood which damages the trees.However, the lecturer says healthy cedars are r...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 477, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Second
...are already sick, damaged, or even dead.Second, according to the reading brown bears c...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 655, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'happens'.
Suggestion: sometimes happens
... rejects this idea and believes that it happens sometimes that bears attack to trees, but it is n...
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Line 1, column 802, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Finally
...ny bears in that area where cedars grow.Finally, the reading passage says changing clim...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, second, so, while, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1092.0 1373.03311258 80% => OK
No of words: 227.0 270.72406181 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81057268722 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39938926292 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 145.348785872 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52422907489 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 331.2 419.366225166 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 13.0662251656 23% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 75.0 21.2450331126 353% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 171.8940242 49.2860985944 349% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 364.0 110.228320801 330% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 75.6666666667 21.698381199 349% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.6666666667 7.06452816374 264% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152267677472 0.272083759551 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890372031081 0.0996497079465 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064370441098 0.0662205650399 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152267677472 0.162205337803 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 39.1 13.3589403974 293% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 3.81 53.8541721854 7% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 5.55761589404 234% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.4 11.0289183223 285% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.8 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.07 8.42419426049 120% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 63.6247240618 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 54.0 10.7273730684 503% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 32.0 10.498013245 305% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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