Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities.To what extent do you ag

It is believed that as a result of growing supermarkets in some countries, local businesses are not able to thrive. This has led to the belief that shutting down small business will lead to death of local communities.I completely agree with this fact.

Firstly, local businesses for example fruits & vegetable shops help a lot of local people to take care of their families. By growing and selling these produce locally, farmers and locals are able to earn enough to feed themselves and take care of their families.

Secondly, when a produce is grown locally, there are no extra charges to be paid for instance for packaging, delivery, transport or for middle men. this reduces the cost of the product and it is beneficial for the buyer as it is sold at a much cheaper price as compared to some of the supermarket products.

Last but not the least, local businesses also help the locals to gain employment and job security. this improves the standard of living of the people to a great extent. When a new shop is opened, it is an opportunity for the people to find jobs and provide education for their children. When there are enough jobs in their own home town, there is no real need to leave the place and go to the cities in search of jobs. This helps them to stay together with their families.

In conclusion, I would say, it is the responsibility of each individual to ensure that supermarkets do not replace local businesses and the Government should take strict action to stop this from happening. The welfare of local businesses should be taken seriously.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1301.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74817518248 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65367358036 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547445255474 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7468734053 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.076923077 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0769230769 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.30769230769 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278889885529 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110420885316 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.094896457143 0.0667982634062 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166968656714 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0979567822197 0.056905535591 172% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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