The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The human lifestyle has changed drastically in last few decades and it has resulted in an increasing number of obese people all around, owing to this, to deal with their health concerns people are putting a lots of pressure on medical care system. whereas there is a group of people who believe that an effective way to deal with this issue is to include physical education chapters in school course modules. I strongly disagree with the opinion as studying about physical education will not solve the issue without a practical implementation.
Out of all the arguments, the strongest one to prove my view point is that adding physical education as course will not be an effective solution because as students are already overburden with the subjects on top of that adding one more subject will increase pressure on them, owning to that instead of learning form the subject they will just study it to pass the exam and the subject will lose its credibility. For example, reading about computer and its operations without performing any practical on real computer system will not teach anything about computers.
Another reason to prove my point is that, it is not only the teenager or school-goers who are facing health issue and trying to find out a solution for this rather the sufferers are lot more than that. So in that case adding a subject in school book will not be an effective solution rather it requires a few bigger initiatives from individual as well as government to beat this issue. For example, recently in India government has declared June 21 as international yoga day, this initiative for awareness regarding yoga and its benefits has helped at a great extent.
In conclusion, I believe that it is the practical awareness among people regarding health and fitness which will help more than a theoretical subject taught in school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, regarding, so, well, whereas, for example, in conclusion, as well as, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94249201278 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67082715317 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527156549521 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.2975951904 168% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.5828630973 49.4020404114 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.888888889 106.682146367 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.7777777778 20.7667163134 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.77777777778 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25081817947 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115248116507 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104328056751 0.0667982634062 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162374263622 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.146201555425 0.056905535591 257% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.1190380762 154% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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