Higher numbers of obese people in the prevailing society have become a great burden on the health care systems. Some argue that physical education at schools could help to tackle this issue. In my opinion, this approach should be welcomed and physical education should be incorporated in the school curriculum.
One of the main reasons why physical health related lesson should be introduced in schools is because it will force all youngsters to learn and follow healthier activities. In other words, when physical education has become a part of their studies, they cannot escape it even if they wanted to do so, hence they will get in to the habits of adhering to a healthier lifestyle eventually. Moreover, with the current competition to achieve other personal goals such as getting into a university or an occupation with a high salary, people often forget or tend to neglect other important aspects such as maintaining the physique. If schools make arrangements to instil the value of being healthy, no doubt that future generation will follow it.
Physical education at earlier stages of life is also paramount because more and more younger people are becoming obese as opposed to older generation. Younger generation often tend to eat unhealthy meals and the lack of physical activities makes the things worse amongst youngsters. Therefore, it is crucial to educate them at an earlier stage of their life, before it is too late.
In conclusion, promoting healthier activities withing the college studies is crucial because it will force younger generation to follow healthier lifestyles and also due to the fact that the earlier they are instilled with proper physical education, the less likely they are to follow unhealthy life styles when they become adults. Therefore, I believe physical education in colleges will have a positive outcome on the society.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 81, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'younger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: younger
...life is also paramount because more and more younger people are becoming obese as opposed to...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18811881188 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69109080886 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554455445545 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.5243752188 49.4020404114 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.0 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195705995987 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738443214341 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455340796059 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121504844675 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388379077273 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 81, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'younger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: younger
...life is also paramount because more and more younger people are becoming obese as opposed to...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18811881188 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69109080886 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554455445545 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.5243752188 49.4020404114 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.0 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195705995987 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738443214341 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455340796059 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121504844675 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388379077273 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.