If you are given a chance to change, what change would you implement in 21 century to make your world a better place to live. Discuss a few changes.

If I get an opportunity to modify anything in this modern life then I can do a few modifications and amendments to make our world more useful for a better living. I believe that any single change in the universe has a great impact on our life in both ways positive and negative.There are some changes demonstrated below in this essay.

In this rampant age of modernism, the life of human from womb to tomb is completely surrounded with the machines.First of all, I wish to ban the usage of machines, which release toxic wastes, those are extremely dangerous for the environment and switch to eco-friendly technology which is also known as green tech, clean tech and environmental tech.Due to this modification, our atmosphere can be preserved through energy efficiency and the reduction of harmful waste. The latest natural science and green chemistry is applied to diminish the detrimental impacts of human activities on the earth such as global warming. As a consequence, we can protect the ozone layer of our planet.

Moreover, I would desire to alter the human lifestyle and revolutionize the usage of robots in unblemished manners. By cause of materialization, people are being dependent on devices and machines for every litter work as cleaning, cooking, travelling, writing. For instance, walking is being eliminated from our life through the various means of transport. Therefore, I would like to spread the awareness for the limited use of technology thus people can amend their routines in a better way. This change would be helpful to enhance their health.

To sum it up, I would like to mention that the eco-friendly technology and a slight change in the lifestyle can have beneficial effects on atmosphere as well as on human life. Secondly, it is strongly required to change the dependency on gadgets which should be in an appropriate level.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for instance, such as, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0355987055 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02363760208 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576051779935 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 102.195482614 49.4020404114 207% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 129.666666667 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4166666667 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0801923144987 0.244688304435 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0338685275777 0.084324248473 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338175759893 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0559719202168 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362156350191 0.056905535591 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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