It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is often observed that friends, media and western culture influence child’s mindset. On the contrary it is seen that family has a significant role in development of child. I opine that children staying with their parents since child hood adapt the same thought process and culture.
On the one hand, it is commonly noticed that child’s brain is malleable at very early age, whatever they see and hear remains with them for lifetime. Parents play a vital role in the enhancement of their personality as they are present with their kids by birth. For example, children coming from dysfunctional family mostly exhibit behavioral issues at school. These kids sometimes becomes furious in difficult situation and endup creating problems with others. Therefore, it is necessary to give loving and caring environment to children at their growing age to define their personality in future.
On the other hand, children not listening to music and those who don’t watch television makes them dumb and dull. It is necessary for kids to play with their peers and if required follow their favorite cartoon character or Bollywood artist. Though it teaches negative and positive aspect, parent’s inculcation forces them to adapt the right thing. For example, children demand toys of their favorite cartoon character and also the costume of their favorite Bollywood actors. Young ones want to follow the lifestyle they get influenced by media. So it is really not mandate that tinytots will be influenced by their surroundings till the time they have been guided by their gaurdians.
In my opinion, kids tends to choose friends whom they find matching their behavior and this gets inculcated by the parents.
To recapitulate, I would rather say that parents are the first school of children where they learn basics and apply in their though process in lifetime.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...growing age to define their personality in future. On the other hand, children not li...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, really, so, therefore, for example, in my opinion, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18874172185 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.587177868 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592715231788 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.6224964084 49.4020404114 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.9375 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.875 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.092912130665 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0408108077363 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057883535352 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0617315549968 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603036230916 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.