It is often discussed that there are natural process for animal species being extinct for instance like dinosaur and dodos in the past. I totally disagree with the point of view that people should try to prevent this from happening.
Overall, I think that we should protect them from being extinct because this activity will help our children to learn about some of the rare animal species and about their habitat also we would not be able to recreate animals that are destroyed.
Firstly, If the animals are not protected than in our future we would not be able to tell our children about the rare species of animals they would go to extinct if we do not preserve them. By protecting them we will be able to show our children about how these animals bring great value to our lives, we can learn about them for example children will be able to study about their biological value and habitat like how they live and about their ecosystem, lifecycles on what kind of foods they survive and these activities will help our children to gain more knowledge and more focused towards their preservation.
Secondly, If some rare animal dies we do not have any resources to recreate them this will be a great loss to the humanity and we would not be able to protect some rare animal species for example in Africa there was only one white male rhino of its kind and due to lack of protection we could not save them most of their ancestors were hunted for their horns and skin and the only one white rhino which was preserved was also dead due to his health issues. Furthermore, we do not have any white male rhinos left now, we will not be able to show our kids this great species that had lived amongst us.
To conclude, I would like to say that it is very important for us to prevent the extinction of rare animal species which will be of great value to us in biological terms as well as a factor with knowledge.
- It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct e g Dinosaur dodos There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening Do you agree or disagree 73
- The diagram shows the life cycle of the honey bee
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- The diagram below shows the life cycle of a frog
- It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct e g Dinosaur dodos There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening Do you agree or disagree 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 24.0651302605 229% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47142857143 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20620460871 2.80592935109 79% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44 0.561755894193 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 20.2975951904 212% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 125.127872095 49.4020404114 253% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 195.625 106.682146367 183% => OK
Words per sentence: 43.75 20.7667163134 211% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.25 7.06120827912 216% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192361068987 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13633303731 0.084324248473 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0947017129332 0.0667982634062 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168761608649 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.146520810957 0.056905535591 257% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.5 13.0946893788 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 11.3001002004 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.53 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.2 10.1190380762 190% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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