In many countries the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of the crime? How can we deal with those causes?
It is undeniable that nowadays the crime rate is being increased in many countries around the globe. The unemployment and lack of a proper punishment system are one of the paramount reasons for the significant increase in crimes. This essay will explore these two issues and highlight some potential measures to prevent them.
The <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-E221D9138B20E3B056E17BFD675EE2D9" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_2050" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by removing this" data-pwa-suggestions="(omit)" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="first and " class="pwa-mark">first and </pwa>foremost cause of <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-66E4B4F680D622EC03BCBA32152B7671" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_2264" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by removing this" data-pwa-suggestions="(omit)" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="significantly " class="pwa-mark">significantly</pwa><pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-66E4B4F680D622EC03BCBA32152B7671" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_2264" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by removing this" data-pwa-suggestions="(omit)" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="significantly " class="pwa-mark"> </pwa>increasing crime rates nowadays is unemployment. <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-7A68CE1EB096E08B8A511AED6B598926" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_321" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by using: In" data-pwa-suggestions="In" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="In other words, in" class="pwa-mark">In other words, in</pwa> the contemporary world, there are fewer jobs available in the market as compared to job aspirants. As a result, people <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-47A941B2FBD10A1D561292B089714C0C" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_2923" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by using: cannot" data-pwa-suggestions="cannot" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="fail to" class="pwa-mark">fail to</pwa> get employment and <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-0B284D073FB39895D78898BD8037860A" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_210" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by removing this" data-pwa-suggestions="(omit)" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="in turn " class="pwa-mark">in turn </pwa>choose the wrong <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-C64CF4F0B7AB9ABBDCAFD28E23A8259D" data-pwa-rule-id="GR_33" data-pwa-category="grammar" data-pwa-hint="Remove comma before this essential relative clause" data-pwa-suggestions="path" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="path," class="pwa-mark">path,</pwa> which leads to committing a crime. To combat this situation, the government should ensure work for all individuals so that no one could ever think to indulge in preparatory to meet both ends.
Another main issue is the lack of punishments given to the convicts. <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-A77D54D7C9FB2CF8569F19A53D6320AD" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_553" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by using: That" data-pwa-suggestions="That" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="This is to say that" class="pwa-mark">This is to say that</pwa> nowadays preparatory are not being punished hard and consequently after serving one's punishment, one turns back to commit a crime. Therefore, the ratio of crimes is being escalated enormously. The solution to this problem involves the government to define strict punishments for <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-6C222DB1CFDAAA4716A4D0AC1BFA0AC6" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_459" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by using: many" data-pwa-suggestions="many" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="all sorts of" class="pwa-mark">all sorts of</pwa> crimes so that convicts do not think of going back to commit a crime.
In conclusion, two of the main reasons for the drastic increase in the crime rates in many countries include unemployment and lack of <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-E3F1489709A353EFA9B58A273229808F" data-pwa-rule-id="DET_CG_2" data-pwa-category="grammar" data-pwa-hint="Possible missing determiner" data-pwa-suggestions="a punishment~the punishment" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="punishment" class="pwa-mark">punishment</pwa> system. <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-08F7BAF9505743D4F19F3D04DFF179BE" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_542" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by using: Both" data-pwa-suggestions="Both" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="Nevertheless, both" class="pwa-mark">Nevertheless, both</pwa> of the issues can <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-4BB53490A769D788413AD8AED605D5AF" data-pwa-rule-id="PASSIVE_VOICE" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="be resolved" class="pwa-mark">be</pwa><pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-4BB53490A769D788413AD8AED605D5AF" data-pwa-rule-id="PASSIVE_VOICE" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="be resolved" class="pwa-mark"> resolved</pwa> by the government by providing jobs and defining a proper set of punishments.
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2020-02-10 | Bisma Humanyun | 11 | view |
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Message: Put a space after the comma
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...hed hard and consequently after serving ones punishment, one turns back to commit a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, in conclusion, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 5997.0 1615.20841683 371% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 465.0 315.596192385 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 12.8967741935 5.12529762239 252% => Less chars per word wanted.
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 14.9533851552 2.80592935109 533% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505376344086 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1619.1 506.74238477 320% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 3.5 1.60771543086 218% => Avg_syllables_per_word is high.
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 365.182304549 49.4020404114 739% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 399.8 106.682146367 375% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 31.0 20.7667163134 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73333333333 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.015826138419 0.244688304435 6% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0328726458285 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515000801169 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0423593630396 0.151304729494 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453754126209 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 54.8 13.0946893788 418% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -120.73 50.2224549098 -240% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 19.3 7.44779559118 259% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 37.8 11.3001002004 335% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 58.13 12.4159519038 468% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.51 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 157.0 78.4519038076 200% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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