Men sports get more attention than women sports. In your opinion, it is a positive or negative development. Please give your opinion.
Women have been subject to ignorance since immemorial times in this male-dominant society, which also implies that male sports get more attraction than women sports. In this regard, some people propound that it is justifiable
that men playing games invariably get more eyeballs, but there are many who convincingly refute it; hence with this dissenting opinion, we see emerging a new discourse. To be candid, I corroborate that in this world of inequality, women sports must also gain the equal interest of people, which is very essential for the development of our society.
Lack of attention in women sports poses devastating consequences on women, both mentally and socially, but what is most worrisome is that it is deteriorating women’s confidence. As a result, reduction in women motivation and self-esteem is inevitable. Self-confidence is indispensable in almost every aspect of life, on the contrary, girls emerge from adolescence with poor self-image and relatively low expectations from life. Hence, with low confidence women start doubting their abilities and are likely to have troubles excelling and achieving great things in life.
The unequal attention in sports may seem minimal to some, but is discrimination nonetheless. The media, for example, present sports as if there are masculine (e.g., football and ice hockey) and feminine (e.g., gymnastics and figure skating) sports, aligning with traditional expectations of male and female athletes, which makes it more difficult to break traditional gender barriers and allowing women to participate in masculine sports and men to participate in feminine sports. In fact, many female athletes are only accepted by society and receive coverage in the media if they participate in traditionally feminine sports. If a woman dares to participate in a masculine sport, their sexuality is immediately questioned
In conclusion, although few nominal forces have been grappling unsuccessfully with the issue of women-inequality, some substantial efforts are required to create enabling environment for women, which may seem onerous task but it is indispensable for the betterment of women and society as well. Otherwise, women-ignorance will be biggest blot on conscience of what we call civilised society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, e.g., hence, if, may, nonetheless, so, well, for example, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1903.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58064516129 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22413713139 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58064516129 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.7885263946 49.4020404114 202% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 158.583333333 106.682146367 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4166666667 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0833333333 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2086481607 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740535766605 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0519755526216 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111831215021 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327941127871 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 13.0946893788 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.14 50.2224549098 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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