It is admitted fact that overweight is root cause for numerous health issues in people. Among many other, one suggestion proposed by experts is to introduce more physical health lessons in school curriculum that would help raise awareness among people. In my opinion, I completely agree this is the best way to reduce health problems caused by weight.
With biological research by experts, they concluded that health issues including high blood pressure, depression and many other are closely linked to people with abnormally heavyweight. It is also believed that growing population of unfit and heavyweight people is consequence of lack of physical exercise and faulty life style. Soothing this situation needs long term plan. Introducing more physical education will really help the cause and persuade more people to take part in sports.
Firstly, modern day schools usually lack play grounds. On the other hand, bad eating habits of particularly children are making the health situation worse. Schools must consider that making sports integral part of curriculum system is need of modern time where children are more lazy and loosing interest in physical activities with time, which is mainly due to increased involvement of children and adults in video games and social media platforms. Where technology is helping society in numerous ways, at the same time it is hurting people health badly. Parents and school management need to play their part to bring children back to sport grounds otherwise health issues will grow with time. Schools need to make sports as part of students grading criteria whereas parents must take care of their children diet habits. More they participate in sports, more their interest will get developed.
In conclusion, to reduce health issues pertaining to overweight, parents and schools need to make combined effort otherwise hight blood pressure and other similar health issues will become inevitable. However, this is long termed plan and need proper attention from parents and schools if we want to see our coming generations healthier.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 174, Rule ID: HEAVY_WEIGHT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'heavyweight'?
Suggestion: heavyweight
...losely linked to people with abnormally heavy weight. It is also believed that growing popul...
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Line 3, column 245, Rule ID: HEAVY_WEIGHT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'heavyweight'?
Suggestion: heavyweight
...ed that growing population of unfit and heavy weight people is consequence of lack of physic...
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Line 5, column 150, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'worse' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: worse
...hildren are making the health situation more worse. Schools must consider that making spor...
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Line 5, column 642, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'sport'.
Suggestion: sport
...ay their part to bring children back to sports grounds otherwise health issues will gr...
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Line 7, column 224, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'termed'.
Suggestion: termed
...ecome inevitable. However, this is long term plan and need proper attention from par...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, really, so, whereas, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1759.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31419939577 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48404516297 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558912386707 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6194966014 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.9375 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6875 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4375 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280250358267 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926354177566 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552464248216 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178859935482 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542923845425 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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