Mobile telephones have brought many benefits but they have also negative effects Do the mobile phones outweigh the advantages

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Mobile telephones have brought many benefits but they have also negative effects.Do the mobile phones outweigh the advantages?

Technology have brought not only advantages but also disadvantages in our lives. I support the idea that the advantages of technology such as mobile phones are bigger than the drawback ones.

First of all, the technology have brought many negative effect to people lives. For example,the mobile phones that we always use can damaged our eyes health. Many people nowdays use their phones for around 2 or 3 hours a day. With that amount of hourour eyes will be damaged by the phones screen light.

In the other hand, technology such as mobile phones make our lives easier. Firstly,mobile phones also help us to communicate with other people. With mobile phones we can contact other people way much easier than the traditional ways. By downloading some app like Gmail, line, facebook, and instagram it only takes about a second to contact other people.

Secondly, technology also help us to do our daily works. For example,back in the 90's people used to sent paper works via paper mails. Nowdays people send their paperworks mostly via electronic mails. This proves that technology help us alot in doing our works.

Technology have brought benefit and negative effect in people lives. Eventhough mobile phones can da,aged our eyes it can also help us to communicate and with our works too.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, for example, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1092.0 1615.20841683 68% => OK
No of words: 217.0 315.596192385 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03225806452 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52199650098 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 176.041082164 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52534562212 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 336.6 506.74238477 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 17.2199693307 49.4020404114 35% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.25 106.682146367 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5625 20.7667163134 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1875 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307379323768 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114592323788 0.084324248473 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0943563573132 0.0667982634062 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194763849759 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0885661358778 0.056905535591 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 50.2224549098 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.3 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 78.4519038076 50% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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