Most artists earn low salaries and therefore should receive findings from the government in order for them to continue with their work.
To what extent do you agree?
Yesterday I read an article about artists, who are low-paid and need a financial support. This leads one to wonder whether governments should pay extra to them so that they would be interested in working in art further. This essay disagrees with this point of view for the following reasons.
The first reason is that the job of artists is unprofitable for governments. The work of artists is usually low-paid compared to other jobs. Therefore, the government often concentrate on lucrative professions, which can generate more taxes, such as bank workers and engineers. Another reason why governments should not pay extra money to artists is that they need to support more important areas. Like artists, teachers and medical workers are not well-paid, but their work is more essential, since education prepares future engineers, and health care saves many lives from various diseases. If the government supported artists as well, this would have negative impact on the salaries of teachers and doctors.
However, some artists claim that the government should support them financially so that they could keep working in art. The reason is that artists could develop their skills to the full. Workers in art often cannot improve their qualifications because they usually have to take a part-time job to support their families. However, if the government added additional pay to their salaries, they could fully immerse themselves in art and produce high-quality work in music, pictures and stage. Despite this, nurturing good artists takes many years, and there is no guarantee that they would reach their goals. Thus, governments should focus on more important aspects of society, which can help people now.
In conclusion, governments should not give an extra funding to artists, since art is not profitable and frivolous in comparison to other occupations.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...terday I read an article about artists, who are low-paid and need a financial support. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31081081081 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69908541716 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550675675676 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1835598028 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.25 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220433491531 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787360531169 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331089781186 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128343571974 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044763998877 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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