Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
As it is commonly sensed, movies and television have a great impact on people's lives in different aspects. In this regard, a few people would deem that such entertainment helps one to become familiar with the real aspect of life which results in improving one's practical skills, but others claim that otherwise. I am among the people believing that the demerits of television and movies outweigh the merits of them in that not only does it impact on the physical health of people, but also it causes some unpleasant effects on the mental health.
The first reason for my propensity for this issue is that young people sometimes are addicted to watching movies and television. The more time they spend, the more they enjoy. In such a case, they are willing to be a sedentary person who has few physical activities. With this in mind, the cardiovascular system in the body may face serious problems. If one does not pay attention to exercise, he will be suffered from heart disease in the near future. It is statistically proven that nowadays lots of young people are inflicted by obesity caused by spending lots of time behind the television. Besides that, Action movies show some exciting scenes such as riding cars in a crazy way with high speed. Due to young people are not mature enough and easily are affected by such movies, they will like to imitate these behaviours which can cause irreversible damages.
Another point which deserves some words is that the young are neglecting the time could spend with their family members and friends since they are getting involved in watching movies and television. The fact of the matter is that it may lead to a weakening relationship in their family and breaking up friendships. In fact, people in their young ages need to develop their communication skills in order to be a sociable person and be successful in their future. Equally important, containing vulgar and sexy scenes, they are supposed to immoral behaviours which could affect in their talk and behaviour.
By taking into account all the aforementioned reasons, one might come to the conclusion that although movies and television can be beneficial, their effects on the physical and mental health of young people cannot be inevitable. It is highly recommended that parents should care about what their children watch because of their huge impacts on the mind and behaviour of their children.
- A/D: people care more about public recognition than about money. Even if no more money is given, public recognition still make people work harder. 40
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2003.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 405.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94567901235 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62738558397 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543209876543 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8090257083 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.823529412 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8235294118 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.29411764706 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201255926681 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620829394567 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620733715649 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122118454009 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481001701884 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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