Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. Discuss ways to solve the problem. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by kryptex on Sun, 10/21/2018 - 15:57

It is true, that overweight became a huge issue for the last couple of decades. Mostly it has influenced people from rich and developed countries. I will discuss the reasons and try to derive some solutions for abolishing this problem.

Firstly, in my opinion, the main reason for obesity is unhealthy foods such as fast food, French fries, and soda drinks. In developed countries, these foods are so much popular and cheaper than people are prone to eat fast food every day. For example, when a person is very busy with work and has insufficient time for cooking food, they just choose to buy fast food. As a result, these foods like burgers, fries, and drinks, make them overweight or obese.

Secondly, many people give little time in physical activities which cause them to gain weight. For example, scientifically it's proven that a person can burn more energy through physical exercise. Therefore, irregular work-life balances can cause people to gain weight.

However, I suppose the government can play a critical role in reducing this problem. The state can introduce strict laws in controlling the marketing activities of fast-food companies. The government can also influence people to lead more active lifestyles. For instance, in China government encourage people to commute through bicycle and start their morning through physical exercises.

In conclusion, obesity is a really big and huge problem for all the people around the world. In my opinion, the Authority should look into this issue more seriously and take proper steps to help citizens.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i suppose, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1342.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18146718147 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61661573351 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.617760617761 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.7277366606 49.4020404114 40% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.875 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1875 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.375 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100028070735 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0356525379533 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436951902248 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0604539873302 0.151304729494 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418105288946 0.056905535591 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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