At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

IELTS 12 test 2 task 2

It is undeniable that the population of the whole country is extremely increasingly without stopping. Among these, there are some countries with less old people and a majority of young adolescences. Because of high birth rate, it becomes a potential impact on the improvement of the countries.

To commence with, the first advantage is that youngsters are regarded as the ones who have the ability to change the world. They are likely to have more knowledge in Information Technology compared with old people. In these modern days, producers and chief executive officers appreciate young adults to work in different kinds of industries. Because of their alertness and cooperating skills, a large number of young workers are taking place in several working areas.

Moreover, young people are also essential for the development of educational, health and other categories. We all know that young rising generations are the main agents of remarkable change and progress. They are educated, flexible and passionate in different kinds of careers. Generation Z, the newest generation,is considered to be the masters of IT age since they are born with the internet and social media.

On the contrary, most old people are well-experienced and sentimental due to their long career. This will be a reason why some young people have to rely on their seniors in order to gain experience and some cultures. Without old generation, all youngsters will be lack of cultures and traditions related with work, country or any other things. Due to some research, they are a lot of young adults continues to be left behind when it comes to business and employment.

Last but not least, young adults have the best quality to transform a country with their own skills and ideas but the role of old people is also needed for a perfect change of the world

Votes
Average: 8.9 (3 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, well, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04516129032 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81566895699 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564516129032 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.2187306382 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.75 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.375 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5625 7.06120827912 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235207398198 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068783028557 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469786994298 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104145850519 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565259694316 0.056905535591 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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