Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life.

Researchers believe that our personality and development are dependant on the conditions we are born in rather than the experiences we have in our lives. I believe that the situations we go through have a greater impact on our character and personality and this essay will discuss my views on this.

It is true that genetics do play an important role in the way we develop. For example, on one hand, a mother who smokes cigarettes and drinks alcohol will obviously have a negative impact ln the way a child is born. Sometimes, this negligence can lead to severe damage resulting in conditions like autism, down syndrome and other birth-related diseases. On the other hand, a mother who is extremely cautious during her pregnancy has a greater chance of having a healthy offspring who could grow up to be a good person.

But the upbringing of a child and the experiences he/she has growing up has a greater influence on the way they turn out to be. Even if a person is born with a very optimistic attitude and the people around him are pessimists, there is a good chance that the person's attitude might turn into a pessimistic one. In the same way, if a person is born to a criminal, the upbringing of that person can help him to not become one himself as he could learn a lesson from the mistakes of his criminal parents and avoid making them.

In conclusion, I feel that even though the characteristics that we are born with do have an effect on our personality, the lessons we learn from our experience and surrounding have a greater impact on our character.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS General Training

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 62, Rule ID: DEPENDENT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'dependent' on?
Suggestion: dependent
...hat our personality and development are dependant on the conditions we are born in rather...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...imists, there is a good chance that the persons attitude might turn into a pessimistic ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, it is true, in the same way, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1291.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62724014337 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81048383526 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530465949821 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.7638026351 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.1 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.39387551238 0.244688304435 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157443756517 0.084324248473 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.166557870587 0.0667982634062 249% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266945010268 0.151304729494 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159205751571 0.056905535591 280% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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