Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training are better ways to help them. Do you agree or disagree?

Crime in modern society is increasing at an alarming rate. Some people advocate that prison sentence is not an effective way to deal with law-offenders, and educating them as well as providing the vocational training can help in rehabilitation to a great extent; others, however, argue that this lenient attitude towards criminal has a potential to raise the number of criminal cases. I would the former view and discuss the arguments to support my case.

Firstly, the criminal justice system ensures a fair trial, and criminals are sentenced to the gravity of the crime committed by them. Society needs to ensure that once the prison sentences are served, criminals should get an opportunity to earn a decent income, and a second chance to live respectfully. Education and vocational training tend to enable them to expand their horizons and to find an employment opportunity as a law-abiding citizen. In fact, the lack of employment is one of the major factors why crimes are committed in the first place. This may lead to a reduction in repeat offenders, leading to an overall reduction in crimes.

Finally, those who argue against the idea point out that it can be a waste of valuable time and resources if prisoners are not inclined to adaptation and not ready to change their behavior. However, it is difficult to identify if a criminal wants to leave his criminal life or not, enabling them to learn and providing professional training can help them realize a potential upside of leaving their past life behind.

In summary, although the idea of education and job training for criminals looks humane and effective, authorities should take serious steps to ensure that prison is equipped with required resources to carry out these activities efficiently.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, so, well, in fact, in summary, as well as, in the first place, to a great extent

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1479.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0824742268 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82082654325 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580756013746 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.7214777212 49.4020404114 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.454545455 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4545454545 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4545454545 7.06120827912 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26297670362 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828637326087 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840731300133 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156420110037 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279413540017 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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