Shopping is dangerous because it makes people selfish and careless with money. Do you agree or disagree?
Some people argue that the very act of shopping itself causes us to become self-oriented individuals incapable of managing money; however, despite having its cons, I believe shopping is not the root of our carelessness.
It is without doubt that modern human cannot live without buying new products once in a while. Advertisement, low quality products, and the culture of consumerism in general, are all the reasons that force us to buy, even if we do not want to. To put is simply, we, as social intelligent animals, have to overcome our mundane needs by the act of shopping. Therefore, it is fair to say that, blame is not on our desire for new items, and claiming that it makes us selfish is intuitively wrong.
However, there is another side to the story which I think is important to address here. Looking at the current statistics of bankruptcy and personal debts, it is indisputable that people has become extremely careless with their money; thus, one might mistake the simultaneous increase in shopping as the reason. However, I think modern life contains a complex interaction of several factors such as cultural norms, capitalism, and unachievable high standards, and both the increase in debts and purchasing are merely the byproducts of this complexity. In other words, they not only do not depend on each other, but also, they both are the result of this complexity, which I call it "the irony of modern world".
In summary, I believe that the act of shopping neither makes us selfish nor have any adverse effect on our money management capabilities, and it is just a misunderstanding. On the contrary, it is the complexity of living the modern life which has made us to be self-oriented and careless.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, while, i think, in general, in summary, such as, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94863013699 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94941360727 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58904109589 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.9193171547 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.363636364 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5454545455 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9090909091 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171959942118 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563011204092 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605135440071 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102947048671 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322002484754 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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