Shopping has become a new favorite pastime for young generation. Why is this the case? Should you encourage them to develop other hobbies too?
In today’s world, it has been getting more frequent for youngsters to spend their free time with shopping. In my opinion, this occurs since it is much more affordable and reachable than the past; however, young adults should also be encouraged to do sports in their free time which would ensure them to flourish vigorously in social and mental terms.
First and foremost, nowadays, shopping is much easier for teenagers due to modest clothing prices and its accessibility in cities. This is because young people can now buy clothes which are both inexpensive and smart that were not available 20 years ago. Furthermore, they can go shopping in a shopping mall where can be found in every corner of urban zones. For instance, brands such as Zara or H&M is located in plenty of stores and the shirts, pants or shoes of these brands are as cheap as groceries, thus most of the teens can easily buy whatever they wish with their limited budget. Consequently, teenagers are inclined to go shopping more than before due to its rising affordability and commonness in cities or towns.
In spite of the attractiveness of shopping, teens should be encouraged to do sports which enable their flourishment abundantly. Considering this, when youngsters participate in sporting activities, they can meet with new friends and be physically active which would make them healthier. To illustrate, it is common to observe that many successful CEO’s of prominent firms played in school basketball teams when they were in college which have forged their friendships in early ages, sustained their health. Besides, they have acquired significant social skills such as being a team player, empathic and disciplined. As a result, young people should spare their time to do sports so as to stay healthy, widen their network and be social individuals which would be helpful in their adult ages.
To sum up, shopping has become a favourable habit for youngsters because they can reach and afford it more than before. Apart from shopping, youngsters should spend their time for sports to improve their particular skills which would be useful especially after their adolescence.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 685, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, apart from, as to, for instance, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in spite of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1825.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 354.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15536723164 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73847583452 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559322033898 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.7756284857 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.357142857 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2857142857 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7142857143 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126942912399 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507118737285 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0321167437512 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878004050467 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.014502523252 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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