These days, every company or organisation wants to be on apex, therefore they are promoting their products through schools, which lead to both positive and negative development. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the arguments and draw a conclusion.
First of all, money from advertising the products of restaurants and any markets help the development of school as well as educational qualities. For instance, school event like science fair and sports event could get funding from the organisation or any firm by promoting their products in school's program, which tends to help students to participate in the function and make their future bright. Hence, this may often leads to benefits upon school and businesses as well.
On the other hand, school is a place where children could build their traits, lifestyle and curriculum activities. While promoting product like junk food, which is rich in sugar and fat, therefore it causes health problems including diabetes, heart disease, asthma and obesity. Though, it is perilous to pupil's health. Moreover, some companies' motive is only to make money nor to other's development. However, this kind of negative impacts on children should be overcome and prevent the risk of disease.
In conclusion, the health of the youth is the wealth of the nation and this must have utmost importance. Therefore, personally, I think it is up to school authority to decide and take up decision whether they have to choose implementation of institute or to development of entrepreneur. In addition, Government also help both school and business.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tes, heart disease, asthma and obesity. Though, it is perilous to pupils health. Moreo...
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Line 5, column 462, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'overcome'?
Suggestion: overcome
... negative impacts on children should be overcome and prevent the risk of disease. In ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1339.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23046875 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84108466698 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60546875 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1599023606 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6923076923 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.7692307692 7.06120827912 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242133671538 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681863686009 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543239208994 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12777419443 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390006283659 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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