In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this

Independent and the best age for young people to learn have caused s vast majority of public controversy. Some experts assert that young people should go on the trip or try to do a job before starting the university because it has various benefits like the proliferation of young people's independence. On the contrary, numerous others claim that the students should study continuously and a year of travel or work's disadvantages is more significant. I personally share the first viewpoint, but I will explain both of the ideas.
Some people believe that go to different places and experience disparate situations make young people confident and independent. They suggest travel or work give a broader view to the young persons and deal with various problems improve their character, helping them cope with challenges. For example, dealing with a wide range of colleagues or customers at work teaches adolescents how to solve their problems and afford the obstacles.
On the other hand, a large number of people, especially parents, think that students should not have a break between high school and university, and when they finish high school, they have to go to college immediately. They believe that pupils forget some lessons such as literature, French, or technics for math problems, affecting their learning quality and making them disappointed because of low scores.
In my opinion, the pros of a year of working or traveling before university are more significant than its cons. The undergraduates attain excellent social skills and can boost their character due to this break which is a long-term effect. However, this year can be the cause of forgetting some technics or lessons. Still, I think the student who learned how to be independent and has an expanded attitude can easily overcome the educational problem and be successful.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 56, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to have'
Suggestion: to have
... the best age for young people to learn have caused s vast majority of public contro...
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Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ford the obstacles. On the other hand, a large number of people, especially parents, think that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, still, for example, i think, such as, in my opinion, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1550.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18394648829 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87975986093 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612040133779 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7050789409 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.230769231 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92307692308 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343073869825 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101914760252 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07202566111 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182942539622 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0900931648124 0.056905535591 158% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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