Some experts suggest that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens happier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some experts suggest that when a country is initially rich, any additional increase in economic wealth has no point in making their residents happier. I completely compromise with that statement and i will give my own opinion in this essay.
It is understandable why the importance of additionally increase in economic wealth in an initially rich country cannot be neglected. To begin with, it will enable the citizens to have a better living condition without any anxiety about the problem that is relevant to financial issues such as the deficiency of budget to allocate on distinctive categories and other economic problems because with the wealthy status, the enterprises in that countries will pay for their employee with a huge salary which assist the citizens to afford to pay for their personal life. Moreover, it is also the factor that help to gain the reputation of the country in the world with the wealthy condition. Subsequently, the other countries will ask for the inter-cooperation which is beneficial to develop and improve the relationship between these countries. Taking The United States as the typical example for this, a country with an extremely rich condition in the world, that country have taken the advantages of that factor and collaborated with several region in the world which is advantageous to their economic wealth. That is the reason why many individuals assume that increase in economic wealth is significant.
However, it have no point in making the citizens of country more happier due to a majority of reason. First, the additional increase in economic wealth forces people to work hard with the heavy workload and heavy schedule which means that they will not have spare time to take a rest or do any recreational activities, so time for entertainment and replenishing their energy will be limited and it will make their life more stressful and always under the pressure.
Additionally, it is not the primary factor that make citizens happier because everyone has their own happiness and it depends on their habit which make them feel more comfortable, so this is the reason why many feel less delighted despite the increase in economic wealth.
In conclusion, the country is already rich should organize more recreational activities or annual festival to make their citizens more delighted and help to refresh their mind because the additional increase in economic wealth is not the factor inhabitants happier.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...oint in making their residents happier. I completely compromise with that stateme...
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Message: i is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...tely compromise with that statement and i will give my own opinion in this essay....
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun region seems to be countable; consider using: 'several regions'.
Suggestion: several regions
...es of that factor and collaborated with several region in the world which is advantageous to t...
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Line 3, column 61, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'happier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: happier
...point in making the citizens of country more happier due to a majority of reason. First, the...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun feel seems to be countable; consider using: 'many feels'.
Suggestion: many feels
... comfortable, so this is the reason why many feel less delighted despite the increase in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, so, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2060.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 399.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16290726817 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85463109045 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46365914787 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 108.903977838 49.4020404114 220% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 171.666666667 106.682146367 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.25 20.7667163134 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297285958616 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136400482878 0.084324248473 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121209045251 0.0667982634062 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204620133751 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0745606599869 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 13.0946893788 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.24 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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