Some experts suggest that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens happier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Several experts have the notion that when a region is initially wealthy, any additional increase in economic wealth has no point in making its inhabitants more delighted. From my perspective, I completely compromise with that statement, and I will give my own opinion in this essay.
It is understandable why the importance of an additional increase in economic wealth in an initially rich country cannot be neglected because it can boost the emotion of citizens. To begin with, it will enable the citizens to have a better living condition without any anxiety about the problem that is relevant to financial issues such as the deficiency of budget to allocate on distinctive categories and their personal recreational activities, which helps them to improve their mental health and feel more relived. Moreover, it is also the factor that helps to gain the reputation of the country in the world with the wealthy condition. Subsequently, the other countries will ask for inter-cooperation which is beneficial to develop and improve the relationship between these countries which allow people to have more opportunities to strike up a conversation with more foreign friends and exchange culture with them which can stimulate their sense of excitement. Eventually, that are the reasons lead to the happiness of human
However, it has no point in making the citizens of the country happier due to a majority of reasons. First, the additional increase in economic wealth forces people to work hard with the heavy workload and heavy schedule which means that they will not have spare time to take a rest or do any recreational activities, so time for entertainment and replenishing their energy will be limited and it will make their life more stressful and always under the pressure. Additionally, it can also make people have to be hospitalized for treatment because working with a busy schedule disable people can lead to several diseases such as obesity and cardiovascular diseases and no one feels joyful when they are in hospital, so the increase in wealth can lead to more negative impacts than making people happier.
In conclusion, the country that is already rich should organize more recreational activities or annual festival/festivals to make their citizens more delighted and help to refresh their mind
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, so, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 374.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20588235294 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01852710858 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508021390374 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 622.8 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.2975951904 182% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.69183529 49.4020404114 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 194.7 106.682146367 183% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.4 20.7667163134 180% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214522967649 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0953768713939 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745568365157 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141546494063 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363573161278 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.8 13.0946893788 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 25.46 50.2224549098 51% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 11.3001002004 167% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.53 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.1190380762 166% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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