Some people say that artists such as painters, writers and musicians affect our life more than scientists. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your experience. (Hong Kong - April 2018)

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Some people say that artists such as painters, writers and musicians affect our life more than scientists. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your experience. (Hong Kong - April 2018)

Different mankind roles have significant contributions to the society and its well-being. Some claim that the influence of artists is of greater importance than the work of scientists. However, I completely disagree with this belief and think that scientific discoveries have equal emphasis on the survival of human beings as that of theater and literature.

Proponents of arts support it because of several merits to the lives of people. One such merit is the encouragement and entertainment that musicians and writers bring to our life. To exemplify, many people face depression and stress-related problems and to overcome these problems, they read inspirational books and listen to music that reduce their mental stress and make them happy and rejuvenated. Another social advantage is that the painters and singers are look up to by young adults who have a passion to paint and sing. To illustrate, children who have a talent for painting and writing can make a career in these fields by following the artists rather than be forced to take up corporate or government jobs.

Though music and novels have their positive impact on individuals, the role of science in the growth and development of a person cannot be neglected. Firstly, the inventions of the medical science play a major part in the health sector. For instance, the vaccines that are discovered by scientists and medical practitioners have aided in preventing people from many diseases like polio and cholera. Secondly, the findings of physicists have improved people's knowledge of the fundamentals of the natural world. In other words, the discovery of the gravitational law and substance nature of day to day use materials have huge effects on the survival of human race.

To recapitulate, despite the cultural and social impact of painters,writers and musicians on the community, I do not agree that they dominate the contribution of the science experts and believe that science technologists have form the foundation for many major areas such as nuclear theories .

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, such as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24770642202 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01900090238 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593272171254 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3668902508 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.571428571 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3571428571 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120171608225 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0404886897589 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510715254547 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0724503998006 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228802634234 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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