Some people say that schools do not do enough to teach young people about health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is always a heated debate about school curriculum content. There is a group of people who asserts that at school level students are not given enough education about medical sciences. I completely agree to this phenomenon, as current school curriculum, particularly health subject requires a lot of improvement. I shall elaborate my stance with valid argument and examples in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, one of the major factor is lack of updated syllabus. No or very little consideration is put to improvise and update the syllabus content according to the recent research in health sector. Medical sciences has drastically revolutionized and scientist are finding ways to cure people by inserting chips in their bodies. Whereas, at elementary level, students are still examining frogs. The orthodox theories and content provides no benefit to the students but only enables them to pass the exam to promote to the next level class.
To elucidate my stance further, the lack of practical learning is adversely affecting young students. At school level, major focus is on theory learning and practical education is least considered. For instance, at my school level, I had attended only couple of practical classes with the standard basic attempts such as reaction of different substances and impact of different doses on animals.
To recapitulate the aforementioned argument, I completely agree to the stance that students are not provided with quality and productive information about health subject at school level and it is overlooked by curriculum establishing authorities. I suggest a considerate amount of effort should be put in to update the content according to recent innovations and discoveries in the medical science sector and sheer focus should be put towards practical learning as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, still, well, whereas, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38461538462 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9728505649 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562937062937 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.664125772 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21428571429 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111370773445 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0418839834153 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455476320114 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0738561978488 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512195063983 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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