Every person wants to be successful in his life. But can diligence alone give the assurance of success or does endowment also plays a crucial role in it? Some people think that it is essential to be diligent because with persistent efforts, it is possible to achieve anything. However, I do not agree with this notion completely for the following reasons.
To embark upon, talent is something which cannot be inculcated into someone forcefully, indeed, it is either present or absent. To advocate my view point, I would like to give an example of myself. When I was a child, my father wanted me to learn Piano for which he not only bought an expensive Piano but in fact, hired a best tutor to teach me. But even after incessant attempts of learning it for four years, I could not do very well. Thus it proves that only industriousness is not enough, indeed, a person must possess skills as well in order to reach to great heights.
Furthermore, it is not feasible to learn something without having interest in it. Like a doctor cannot become an excellent singer unless he has good voice and passion for it. He might gain knowledge of music by taking tuition from a singer. But it is impossible to buy or to develop good voice, essential for singing. Hence, the significance of natural endowment is inevitable.
To recapitulate, I admit that we must put our maximum efforts to fulfill our dreams but it is vital to be realistic too. One should definitely contemplate whether we have the required skill to be able to do best in a specific profession or not. Because it is doable to assemble the resources required to perform some task but is absolutely impossible to purchase the talent needed to do it with excellence.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 321, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...t an expensive Piano but in fact, hired a best tutor to teach me. But even after ...
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Line 3, column 438, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...r four years, I could not do very well. Thus it proves that only industriousness is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, thus, well, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1426.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70627062706 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71287530213 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607260726073 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1208789583 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8823529412 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8235294118 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94117647059 7.06120827912 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0640029886709 0.244688304435 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0193975735421 0.084324248473 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309189543164 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0383932396884 0.151304729494 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364416975238 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.0946893788 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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