Some people say that teenagers should work part-time and earn money. This way they will learn basic lessons about work and become more disciplined. Others argue that teenagers shouldn't sacrifice their rest and after-school activities to work.Discuss both

It is debatable that adolescents are meant to do a part-time job to make some earning which would make them understand the culture of society and teaches them discipline and responsibilities. While others believe that it is not fair to work by younger adults after school hours as it ruins their rest and relaxation which is essential to them. In this essay, we will discuss both the views.

to begin with, teens who are most active physically at their age are on excitement and enthusiastic to pursue any activity that interests them. No matter whether it's a good or a bad activity if it makes them attract in doing that they just jump into it. If they are confined to take rest and sitting idle or wasting valuable time in useless activities it might ruin their future. Because, they cannot understand the seriousness about the life and how to go through its consequences such as financial growth which needs self-control and work-life balance which inturn is crucial to know by every grown up child. For example, children in mexico are addicted to drugs, as they don't tend to actively participate in any thing such as outdoor activity or games. Now, its every parent nightmare there in mexico about their children's future as they dont have idea where they might end up.

On the other hand, if a teen undertakes responsibility of doing a part-time job it would make them earn enough for their own pocket money, this is to say that they have already decreased their parents burden of giving money everday to them. Also, this makes them being responsibilities as they do their work and it teaches treating people equally without any differences. Majorily it makes a young adult understand the value of money. So, they can build better future for themselves.

To conclude, although taking rest after schooling hours gives them temporary happiness. Working part-time of full time and earning money would give immense satisfaction along with basic principles fo life which are essential for a better future of a child.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, thus, while, for example, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90379008746 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66337660799 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577259475219 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9633800495 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.133333333 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8666666667 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271551779223 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932773052359 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506915213481 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177861595275 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232816706643 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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