For some people shopping is not just about buying what is necessary, but a form of entertainment. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?
Nowadays people spend more and more time is the shops. People buy the goods, both for entertainment and for necessary purposes. If consumers take shopping as an entertainment it can have negative impact for enviroment as well over consumption can happen. Furthermore, we could spend that money and time for leisure activities. If taking those factors consideration I firmly belive that this is a negative development.
Overconsumption and mass production are big threats to the world ecosystem. Factories will spend huge amounts of resources. Every activities will leave the ecological footprint. By buying products wich are not necessary we fuel that system. If we do not change our ways the global worming and other climate changes can speed up. We can have a closer look how china is main mass producer in the world. For example, if we grab random plastic object near us I am pretty sure it is made in china. And if we do same in dump yard, i am certain that the answer is same. That example illustrates perfectly why it is not smart to produce low quality and pointless goods wich will end up in garbage after opening package.
Instead wasting our money and percusse time in shops we could use them for other purposes. More than ever commercial sabotage us to spent money and time to buy things we actually do not need. Many people spend all weekend in shop. It can lead to addiction where we spend most of our money and time. If we could break that cycle, we would have more money and time for that vacation or car we dreamed of. A good illustration is my good friend Vivian. She had higher income than me but, Vivian could not join me to vacations. After I explained how I only buy things I really need and instead work at weekends she realized that things need to change. Next year she had new car and we went to Bali together.
To end how mass production damages earth aswell people wellbeing we can agree that things need to change. It is often said that big things will start form small changes. By consuming less we support our ecosystem and saving money and time. If we do that next car or vacation will be closer than you can think.
- The leaders or directors of organizations are often older people. But some people say that young people can also be a leader. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 73
- People Think A Law Should Exist So That Young People Under 18 Cannot Be Out After Midnight 56
- Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles.Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. 56
- Today the quality of life in large cities is decreasing Discuss the causes and solutions 11
- At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? 61
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 328, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... money and time for leisure activities. If taking those factors consideration I fi...
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Line 3, column 526, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... china. And if we do same in dump yard, i am certain that the answer is same. Tha...
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Line 3, column 656, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'goods'' or 'good's'?
Suggestion: goods'; good's
...rt to produce low quality and pointless goods wich will end up in garbage after openi...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
... up in garbage after opening package. Instead wasting our money and percusse time in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, if, look, really, so, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 7.85571142285 267% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 24.0651302605 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58961038961 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50535065797 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54025974026 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.8157978451 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.4444444444 106.682146367 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2592592593 20.7667163134 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.48148148148 7.06120827912 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 3.4128256513 352% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129285385769 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391740686321 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442065616883 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0925740189709 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446803273 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 13.0946893788 56% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 50.2224549098 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 11.3001002004 57% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.75 12.4159519038 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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