Often people are interested in watching a sport or a performance from a popular artist in live, and they end spending a lot of money on procuring the tickets. In my view, it is a good as long as this behaviour does not turn out to an obsession.
Looking at the positive side of the argument, most people have a dream to watch a sport where their admired player is partispating in the live match or attending the show hosted by their star. On attending this kind of event will not only fullfill their dream, but it gives them a sense of accomplishment and satisfaction. this is quiet a good thing, it boots their spirits and persuades them to work towards their other goals they have. Finally, this kind of events help greatly in many ways; for instance, a music show was conducted for charity, the higher price of the tickets allows the organizers to save a good margin after excluding the costs to host the event. Such events are more effective in raising the money for social cause.
On the other hand, few people are obessed with their stars and they tend to follow where ever their start travels. People with this behaviour tend to spend majority of their savings towords these events. Eventually, this leads to a financial crisis. If the money or the time spent on these events is spent on family, it would have improved the better understanding of family members . Lastly, each year the costs to conduct and the money spent on these events by the audiance is close to 5 billion dollars. If this money would have been spent on education or health care of anyone of the poor nations, would have greatly improved the quality of living for atleast few people.
To conclude, I belive that this behaviour is good as long these a close check on the frequency of attending tese events and the financial defecit caused by attending these events
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Suggestion: had been
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, lastly, look, so, for instance, kind of, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63525835866 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42509265393 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528875379939 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0766268821 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.928571429 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215878581629 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769917895911 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503658928049 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134756430637 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057773160447 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 50.2224549098 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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