Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age.

It is argued that the age of retirement should be 65 for everyone, however, others believe that particular employees should be able to retire early. I agree with the later view. From my point of view, people working in the mining and production factories should be exempted from the guideline of retirement depicted by the government.

For instance, people become physically feeble as they grow older, they find it difficult to perform all of their duties efficiently as they were able to when they were young. It is evident that working in factories requires physical fitness and mental steadiness as several tasks manual labor centric such as heavy lifting and operating heavy machinery. Because of less physical capabilities, workers over 65 might not perform rapidly and thus delaying the production at the factory which may result in a loss for the company. In addition, in old age worker tend to lose their eyesight and hearing efficiency as well, hence it is quite possible that they are unable to follow instructions properly which may affect their job. Moreover, the risk of potential injuries is higher, if they get injured while at work, the company will be liable for the compensations. Hence, to mitigate the risk, it is advisable that factory workers should be able to retire early.

Additionally, with digital technology, most of the factories also computerizing their systems, as we know the previous generation known as baby boomers are not very tech-savvy thus they find it challenging to operate new systems at the factories. Even though most of the companies arrange training, however, learning capacities decline as workers reach beyond the age of 60, also they are not willing to adapt new technologies and adherent about their old working techniques which may result in conflict among the employees at the workplace.

To recapitulate, although there is a certain age of retirement, if a particular industry demands early retirement and pension because of their job roles, the age restriction should be waived.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 736, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly which may affect their job. Moreover, the risk of potential injuries is higher...
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Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'operating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: operating
...ech-savvy thus they find it challenging to operate new systems at the factories. Even thou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1752265861 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79195599899 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561933534743 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.3468789712 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.75 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5833333333 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.91666666667 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234723821559 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848150881607 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597913408095 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150168800602 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406668843314 0.056905535591 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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