Some people think the qualities a person needs to become successful in today s world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution To what extent do you agree or disagree

There is a discussion about whether or not higher education can provide students with qualities that can lead to success. While I accept that studying at university is useful, I believe students should also learn from real-life activities.

On the one hand, I agree that young people should attend academic institutions if they want to be successful. Firstly, when going to university or college, students can acquire basic knowledge about their fields. Universities often provide theories which have been collected by many experienced professors after years of researching. There are also a great number of materials and case studies provided to help students enhance their understanding of the subject, so learners can easily approach fundamental knowledge without putting too much effort. Secondly, university students are usually supported by tutors and instructors. All the questions arising can be answered quickly by those experts, so people who attend higher education could study more effectively than those who do not.

On the other hand, individuals cannot become successful with only academic knowledge. They need to broaden their skills in the real working environment. Theories learnt from universities could be very different from reality, so people are more likely to fail if they are not sufficiently prepared. For example, many students graduate with excellent results, but they cannot have a job due to their lack of experience. Furthermore, people need to improve their interpersonal skills apart from knowledge. In order to be successful, they need to know how to handle relationships and deal with others. These abilities can be gained through working or doing voluntary jobs.

In conclusion, I think people should improve their qualities through both academic institutions and real-life situations if they want to achieve success in current world.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, while, apart from, for example, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55052264808 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90363716585 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602787456446 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8948904099 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5625 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9375 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6875 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220966009174 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725182238101 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523527323473 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139850709974 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03685387796 0.056905535591 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.61 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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