Some people think that school children need to learn practical skills such as car maintenance or bank account management along with the academic subjects at school To what extent do you agree or disagree

Every parent wants their child to have a good career and successful future and for which they sometime encourage him to pick up some practical acquirement as well in addition to the school education. But is this kind of approach is positive for the young generation and the society at large? Although, many people might support this notion but I firmly disapprove it by providing evidences to justify my view point further in this essay.

To embark upon, children nowadays, have circumscribed time to do everything. In modern world, syllabus in schools is vast which demands ample of time and diligence to assimilate. It is difficult to spare time to other activities. Nonetheless, if students will try than their grades will be affected which can be indeed perilous for their future. I can reminisce, I wanted to become a professional dancer and hence I joined dance classes. However, soon my result started deteriorating because dance training was taking a lot of time and energy.

Additionally, diverting mind from school books to some other accomplishment could be deceptive too. It is no exaggeration to state that often when naive children begin to get paid in return of their services during the process of developing a skill, it generally mislead them. For example one of my friend's sixteen year old son joined gym on part time basis but when he started to get money for it, he suddenly became tempted and decided to take up the job full time and discontinue his education. So, this can be detrimental for the youth.

To recapitulate, I would mention assertively that the cons of gaining eruditeness in some practical skill far outweigh any positive repercussions. One should always promote children to complete their education first and then devote time and energy to sundry acquirements as they will definitely add on to their resume and benefit them to grow. But this must not be achieved at the cost of school education because it's importance is inevitable.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'misleads'?
Suggestion: misleads
...ess of developing a skill, it generally mislead them. For example one of my friends six...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'son' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'sons'.
Suggestion: sons
...mple one of my friends sixteen year old son joined gym on part time basis but when ...
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Line 5, column 343, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ends sixteen year old son joined gym on part time basis but when he started to get money ...
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Line 5, column 458, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
... tempted and decided to take up the job full time and discontinue his education. So, this...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, nonetheless, so, then, well, for example, in addition, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1649.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99696969697 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85322140045 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624242424242 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5321122578 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0625 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107278926028 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0360644402556 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345319951419 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0684457772846 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0223014762883 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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