Write a letter to professional photographer, saying you liked the photos of your family members taken by him, and would you like him to take pictures of another event in your family.

Dear James,

I am a patron of your shop and am writing to request you to cover an important occasion in my family, which is going to take place next week.

Also, I want to thank you for taking such lovely pictures of my family in a function recently held at Justin hall in South Avenue. Those photos are not only beautiful but also treasure able as I will always cherish the time captured in them. Everyone in my family has appreciated your fine work.

Therefore, we all have decided to hire you for an extremely important event, which is the marriage of my elder daughter. I hope you can anticipate the significance of it and would agree to accept my proposal .

The ceremony is going to occur in Christine Hall, it is near your shop. The function will start at 7.00 PM and I want you to reach there by 6.30 PM so that you do not miss the beginning of it.

Awaiting your prompt reply.

Yours faithfully,
John

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: AM_I[1]
Message: Did you mean 'am I'?
Suggestion: am I
...ames, I am a patron of your shop and am writing to request you to cover an impo...
^^
Line 7, column 208, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...it and would agree to accept my proposal . The ceremony is going to occur in C...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 759.0 937.175257732 81% => OK
No of words: 170.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46470588235 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39999886005 2.54303337028 94% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 127.690721649 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.670588235294 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 235.8 290.88556701 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8340985664 44.8134815571 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.9 76.5299724578 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 16.8248392259 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 4.34317383033 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247831273603 0.216113520407 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0949405550379 0.0766984524023 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0328173963044 0.0603063233224 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124707036911 0.12726935374 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222079325879 0.0580467560999 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 8.37731958763 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.29 8.71597938144 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.