Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
While some people believe that top performing athletes deserve significantly higher compensation, others hold the opinion that it’s not justified compare to other professions. In my opinion it is important to value sports talent by offering them higher monetary benefits as they can give back to society as well.
On one hand of the argument there are people who hold the view that sports professionals are paid exorbitantly, some of the compelling reasons are as follows. Firstly, sports professionals do not bring any tangible benefits to trade or economy compared to scientist, teachers, politicians or civil services personals, who actually solve common day problems and improve our lives. Furthermore, many athletes and sportsmen get involved doping cases, match fixing scams or endorsing substandard while products clinching medals. As a consequence they do not focus on sport or playing their game and instead end up getting involved in many antisocial and legally unacceptable activities upon gaining their celebrity status.
Despite of the above argument, I am of the perspective that higher remuneration to athletes is somewhat justified. Indeed one reason for my view is due to the fact that star sports professionals demonstrate extraordinary endurance, hard work and physical talent that can motivate everyone to lead to healthy life style. Additionally, sports starts can bring a spirit of patriotism and unity amongst their fans. As a result of such dignity and pride they can unite diverse nations which is priceless. As Social awareness campaigns are hard to be executed, the celebrity status of sports stars can convey such messages to massive set of audience with ease. For example the social awareness campaign about recycling plastic by Indian cricketers has been well received.
In conclusion, while both views are commonly held in the society, I believe that there are definitely a set of athletes who deserver high remuneration compared to the rest. Given the situation, it is imperative to recognize athletes with a better monetary contribution when they use their stardom to bring positive changes to the society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 113, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...tion to athletes is somewhat justified. Indeed one reason for my view is due to the fa...
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Line 4, column 121, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a deserver'.
Suggestion: who is a deserver
... there are definitely a set of athletes who deserver high remuneration compared to the rest....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38988095238 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93783468928 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613095238095 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3794336668 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.357142857 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18284361611 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593673310835 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644961966567 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115029467888 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795099377196 0.056905535591 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.