We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
A section of society asserts that it is impossible to help every nation in the world, and thus, communities and countries will thrive if they pay attention to meeting their demands only. I completely disagree with the assertion and believe that in this contemporary world, every country, in one way or the other, depends on other nation for sustenance.
To begin with, there are multiple economically deprived countries where people live under poverty, and therefore, these nations do not possess enough power or resources even to fulfil the demands of their citizens. In such conditions, the affluent nations can become a helping hand and provide financial as well as strategical aids. The developed nations, who can afford to assist the countries under destitution, are morally obliged to offer help because, otherwise, thousands of people would lose their lives while trying to make the two ends meet. For instance, development of the parliament house in Afghanistan by India has immensely improved the political conditions in a war inflicted nation.
Furthermore, in this era of globalisation, not only the economy but also the survival of people in many countries are dependent on other nations. A large number of countries survive by trading invaluable commodities, such as crude oil, spices, herbs, electronic gadgets and medicines, whose economy would collapse if they will focus only on the goods that they have. Moreover, a host of developed countries seek for appropriate skills that they require to enhance their workforce and to meet the demands which cannot be accomplished by the locals. The introduction of provincial nominee program by the Canadian Immigration to fulfil the requirement of workers in various occupations is an illustration of mutual benefits that the people from underprivileged nations and the government of a developed country can gain.
To conclude, no nation can flourish independently. The economy of every country relies on other countries, and therefore, the best way to live in peace and harmony is by developing strong bonds and mutual understanding with everyone.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 147, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
...untries are dependent on other nations. A large number of countries survive by trading invaluable...
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Line 9, column 454, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'enhancing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: enhancing
...or appropriate skills that they require to enhance their workforce and to meet the demands...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1790.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37537537538 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99078595966 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591591591592 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.0485250081 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.166666667 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.75 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113558035973 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426576138083 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033372437449 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0748270876624 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344704128938 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.