why want to live in I house
I have attended 11 different schools, interned in Korean security company, and served in Korean Army. No matter how many changes I’d been through, making friends and adopting in new environment were always challenging. Honestly, it was not only my capability. I am in a huge debt to many who took care of me who was flustered at totally new surroundings. I hope to repay those debt to exchange students who will be living in I-house around me.
Five years ago, I entered a highschool cafeteria without any friends to sit with. At that morning, I promised myself that I will be an active, friendly, and hardworking international student. However, it was because of the winter semester when students are already in groups, my bad english which people barely understand, or just simple excuse. In Korea, friends formed around me, but , at that time, I was just a weird-looking asian boy. That couple minutes in a line was the longest moment in my life. I looked around every table, and I found two asian students sitting in front of the door. We shared hardship being an international student, and I felt a sense of belonging. Later, I found I ruined their date, but i was that desperate. I learned that just eating with new people can mean a lot to them. I never forget people who kindly taught me how to unlock the locker, took me home after varsity games, and slowly repeated their words several times.
Especially, I remember my past host families Bob and Sandy, most. After their children branched their new families, they kindly took me as a new child. They always took me along with them wherever they went, and kindly introduced me. They cooked delicious meal and took me expensive restaurants. They were pleased when I got accepted to college, and greatly worried when I broke my ankle while skate-boarding. Sandy even took a leave on that day to take me to hospital. Even now, they contact and care about me by Facebook. In the US, I have given excessive love from many people around me.
Sometimes, I wondered why people are so nice to me. I was a poor little Korean who couldn’t even communicate fluently. But I am not always that little Korean teenager. During the 4 years in the US, I am not afraid of speaking English, and I have solid dream to being a professor who studies a computer vision and help visually disabled people.
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 50
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- College and university education should be free for all students, fully financed by the government. 75
- According to a recent report, cheating among college and university students is on the rise. However, Groveton College has successfully reduced student cheating by adopting an honor code, which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic en 41
- "Government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development." 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 378, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this debt' or 'those debts'?
Suggestion: this debt; those debts
...tally new surroundings. I hope to repay those debt to exchange students who will be living...
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Line 3, column 387, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... In Korea, friends formed around me, but , at that time, I was just a weird-lookin...
^^
Line 3, column 721, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...Later, I found I ruined their date, but i was that desperate. I learned that just...
^
Line 5, column 298, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...meal and took me expensive restaurants. They were pleased when I got accepted to col...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, honestly, however, if, look, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 71.0 24.0651302605 295% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1952.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 414.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71497584541 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66965333303 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 176.041082164 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570048309179 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 25.0 5.43587174349 460% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 0.809619238477 1359% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8159016625 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.2962962963 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3333333333 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.59259259259 7.06120827912 23% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0331859402775 0.244688304435 14% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0101593496548 0.084324248473 12% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369062665204 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0261175852941 0.151304729494 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278835948088 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 13.0946893788 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 12.4159519038 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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