Dear Rohit,
I am extremely apologist to what had happened last evening . The loud music caused from my flat was not at all appreciable from my end . As you know we have two kids at my place who are really naughty and they are in a habit of listening to high volume music.
They needed to be told again and again regarding the inconvenience caused by my music. But unfortunately as my cousins are out of town and i am the only person who can be a baby sitter to them. So if in any case i scold them they might feel bad about it . Also i want to tell you that ill try to hide the remote control from them to avoid such situation again.
Hope you can relate to my problem and understand my situation.
Regards,
avni
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...logist to what had happened last evening . The loud music caused from my flat was ...
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Suggestion: .
...t was not at all appreciable from my end . As you know we have two kids at my pla...
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Line 5, column 140, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ately as my cousins are out of town and i am the only person who can be a baby si...
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Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...erson who can be a baby sitter to them. So if in any case i scold them they might fee...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... baby sitter to them. So if in any case i scold them they might feel bad about it...
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Line 5, column 254, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... scold them they might feel bad about it . Also i want to tell you that ill try to...
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Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...old them they might feel bad about it . Also i want to tell you that ill try to hide...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...hem they might feel bad about it . Also i want to tell you that ill try to hide t...
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Line 10, column 5, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...derstand my situation. Regards, avni
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, regarding, so, you know, in any case
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 41.998997996 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 586.0 1615.20841683 36% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 139.0 315.596192385 44% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.21582733813 5.12529762239 82% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.43363162301 4.20363070211 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35270297054 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 176.041082164 55% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.697841726619 0.561755894193 124% => OK
syllable_count: 189.9 506.74238477 37% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.0333148354 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.25 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.375 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0732563267652 0.244688304435 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0292951435277 0.084324248473 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0240831336297 0.0667982634062 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0530385435373 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0173140193855 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 13.0946893788 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.9 12.4159519038 56% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 78.4519038076 34% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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