No one cast a shadow on the fact that advent of the music was a spectacular revolution and also it plays a vital role in people's life from childhood to adulthood and there are several reason for people which tend to listen music at various times.I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following paragraph.
To begin with, listening to music in every situation offers a great opportunity in which people can get relaxed. What I mean is that, in the hectic world which people spend most of their time on working, they really need relaxation. My own experience demonstrates this reality. wherever I am, even in office during my break time I put my headphones and start listening to music. So on that time I distance from my works and I find myself in a deep states of relaxation. besides, I repeat it every day since it can gladden my mind and boost my happiness.
Secondly, listening to music gives us a chance to learn about many cultures. In other words, every kind of music depict the story of their society and it provides a lot of information which can increase our knowledge. Let me illustrates with one of my experiences. When I was a sophomore, I had a lot of free time and it was a perfect opportunity for me to get familiar with foreign musics. I found many musics which was relevant to famous musician and they describe their community. It was a great experience since, I improve my knowledge.
Music is a way of sharing a common bond or feeling. When we’re children, we learn very simple songs called nursery rhymes. These songs help make us part of our culture by telling us what’s acceptable and what’s not. We play and sing music in our religious ceremonies because it enhances the worship experience. We play music when we’re going to war or celebrating the fact that we’re won a war.
In conclusion, as I mentioned above people are fond of listening to music at different times. Since it is not only soothing bu also informative. Also, it is a kind of food for our soul to become happier.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
...om childhood to adulthood and there are several reason for people which tend to listen music a...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...h tend to listen music at various times.I feel this way for two main reasons whic...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...ll explore in the following paragraph. to begin with, listening to music in every...
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Suggestion: Wherever
...n experience demonstrates this reality. wherever I am, even in office during my break ti...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Besides
... myself in a deep states of relaxation. besides I repeat it every day since it can glad...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: besides,
... myself in a deep states of relaxation. besides I repeat it every day since it can glad...
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Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... listening to music at different times. Since it is not only soothing bu also informa...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... not only soothing bu also informative. Also it is a kind of food for our soul to be...
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Message: Use only 'happier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: happier
...s a kind of food for our soul to become more happier.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, really, second, secondly, so, i feel, i mean, in conclusion, kind of, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1341.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 297.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51515151515 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68569124349 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558922558923 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.6810474947 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8125 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5625 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257947748526 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767427134295 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103696385637 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173721914957 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802132129246 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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