Many things have changed in the 21st century, and these changes have had a profound impact on human life. These changes have brought prosperity for some and problems for others. In my opinion, these changes can include violent behavior such as terrorist acts that are a major problem for the whole world today, as well as the migration of people to developed countries more like escaping from their homeland in any way.
First, Violent terrorist behavior are intended to pressure governments to carry out their demands. A selfish act that kills innocent people and ultimately does no good for ordinary people. It only leads to war and bloodshed and insecurity. Sometimes children will be the most victims of these events. For years, gas and oil resources have been waged in countries with these resources, and people are living in fear and anxiety in the face of sanctions and unemployment, such as Iran. Or, for example, in Afghanistan for many years, children have not seen a normal single day. Every night, not matter is winter or summer, electricity is cut off and also most schools are bombed. People are not safe and carry weapons because they fear their children, women and sisters will be attacked. And this is a disaster. The terrorist acts and the bombings are not only in Asia, but also in France, America and many other countries, and unfortunately this cruel act has mourned many families.
Second, in countries where there has been war for years and underdeveloped and people are living in hard situations, salaries are also being paid late because the government has no financial resources or is a poor country like Iran and Afghanistan. Therefore, they think it's the best idea to make a Better Life for themselves and their Children is immigrating to developed Countries such as Germany and the United States. But there are no guarantees that people will come to this country safely. Many of them drowned in the ocean or fell ill in the woods and died. Even those who arrived were deported, some sent to other countries, and some lost their families. All these events are very sad, why these people have to flee their country? why they couldn't make it in their country? why there is so much difference between people, and we are not all same humans. Many received asylum in the host countries and now live much better than their hometowns. And many also migrated legally. Those people who have stayed in their home countries are so poor that they can do nothing and pray every day that their conditions will improve, but they will not get better.
In conclusion, in the 21st century, the events of the bombings and terrorist groups, and on the other hand, poverty and misery are at the expense of the people of the whole world, and though there is nothing to be done by anyone, I wish that the government of the men of any country would be more humane. With the development of technology and the advancement of science, scientists have brought human welfare to life. But I wish we could add some peace to the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 39.0 13.8261648746 282% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2534.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 527.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80834914611 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46702524087 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481973434535 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 783.0 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 13.0 1.86738351254 696% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.7308421992 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8518518519 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5185185185 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88888888889 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 3.85842293907 441% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0591041105358 0.236089414692 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0197659725887 0.076458572812 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0297756906959 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0392845237435 0.150856017488 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179142910924 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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