Life is a game and we should play it. In order to win the game sometimes, we have to take risks. I prefer to take risks in life to try something new. There are reasons to it which I am going to explore in the essay with the help of some examples.
I believe that we should keep trying new things in life. Trying different things helps us to learn something new. We can achieve great heights of success by giving attempt to something new and risky. One should come out of his/her comfort zone. One of my friend left his job in order to prepare for government job. One has to give several examinations to get in to the government job, which are not that easy. He prepared for the examination for two years and finally got selected for the job. He took risk by giving up his job to try something new and by doing hard work he achieved the success that many people only dream for. Success in life come to those people who gamble things to attempt something new.
I can say that one should have self-believing and courage to attempt new work. These two are important factors and key to success. The example of Bill Gates and Mark Zuckerberg is apt here. Bill Gates started his company with some of his friends in the car-garage. He took risk by trying to make something new which changed the history of software industry. He believed in himself and rest is the history. Similarly, Mark Zuckerberg made Facebook with help of his friends. The result of which is one cannot imagine his/her day-to-day activity without surfing Facebook. It has became an integral part of our lives. There are many such examples to look up for. All these people took risk and strived hard to make something new. They directly or indirectly touched and influenced the life of all people. They are all famous world known personalities.
Things which we can do easily makes our life monotonous. There is no fun in doing the work in which we are good. Trying something new by coming out of comfort zone makes the difference in one's life. To sum up, I must say that one should keep trying something new in life. Life is too short to do same things one must try and take risks in the life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...in order to prepare for government job. One has to give several examinations to get...
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Line 5, column 577, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...tivity without surfing Facebook. It has became an integral part of our lives. There ar...
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Line 7, column 189, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...of comfort zone makes the difference in ones life. To sum up, I must say that one sh...
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Line 7, column 318, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...is too short to do same things one must try and take risks in the life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, look, similarly, so, as to, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44221105528 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35024969835 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462311557789 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.6988716659 48.9658058833 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 57.0322580645 100.406767564 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.8387096774 20.6045352989 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.61290322581 5.45110844103 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200649950406 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560486839186 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544294706666 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135330585527 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329453963052 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.9 11.7677419355 50% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 58.1214874552 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.58 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.45 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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